Use sequencing words like “once,” “then,” and “afterward” to show clear logical flow between stages.

Model Essay
Important functional words are highlighted in red
Sequencers are highlighted in green
Synonyms and topic vocabulary are highlighted in blue
Introduction
The diagram compares the process by which electricity is generated in two types of hydroelectric power station. Overall, the traditional plant uses three main stages, whereas the run-of-river design uses five.
Body paragraph 1
In a traditional hydroelectric power plant, river water rises behind a dam until it is high enough to enter an intake pipe near the top. Once it enters, the water flows down into a much lower turbine chamber, where it causes the machine’s blades to rotate, thus generating electricity. This power is then sent via transmission lines to customers’ homes.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand, in a run-of-river hydroelectric plant, the natural downhill flow of water is harnessed to turn the turbine blades. Initially, water is channeled away from the river’s main course down a pipe into a turbine building further down the hill. Upon entering the building, the water rotates the turbine blades, which in turn spin a generator that produces electricity. This power is then carried by transmission lines above the plant to where it is needed. Surplus water then exits the plant and rejoins the river to resume its original course.