取得作文批改與文法糾錯，以及詳細分數報告。
assignment
取得高級寫作評論
寫作批改範例
分數總覽
AI 評審
文法修正與回饋
藍色為學術語言建議
綠色為整體評論
詳細回饋
作文文法修正與改進建議
Last week, I tried to submit two of my poems by through the online submission form on your website. After I upload uploaded my files and click clicked the submit button, the page suddenly show showed an error and become became blank. I did not receive any confirmation email, so I am not sure if my poems was were received or not.
Could you please tell me about the status of my submissions? I worry that maybe they did not go through.
任務完成度
優點
- 寫作目的與請求清楚
- 能交代自己是讀者與支持者的背景
- 語氣禮貌，問題直接
- 提供了問題發生時的重要細節
寫作目的與請求清楚：這封信用簡單明確的方式說明寫信原因。你提到提交詩作時系統出錯，並希望確認投稿狀態；「Could you please tell me about the status of my submissions?」這句話讓請求非常直接，也符合這封信的目的。
背景交代良好：你先說明自己是雜誌讀者，也表達喜歡這本雜誌。這能幫助工作人員理解你的身分與關心原因，開頭也顯得友善。
語氣禮貌：你使用了「I hope you are fine」和「Could you please...」等禮貌表達，讓請求更專業、也更容易被接受。
問題細節充足：你提到提交了兩首詩、使用線上投稿表單、頁面出現錯誤並變成空白，而且沒有收到確認信。這些資訊能幫助對方查詢系統問題。
弱點未發現明顯弱點。
整體組織
優點
- 段落結構清楚
- 從稱讚、問題到請求的順序合理
- 每一段都有明確重點
- 篇幅簡潔，沒有離題內容
段落結構清楚：信件分成三個短段落，第一段提供背景與稱讚，第二段說明問題，第三段提出請求。讀者可以很容易一步一步理解。
邏輯順序自然：你先建立正面語氣，再說明發生的問題，最後提出希望對方協助的事項。這樣的順序有助於讀者快速掌握情況。
段落焦點明確：每段都只有一個主要功能，因此整體清楚且容易閱讀。
篇幅適中：內容沒有加入無關故事或過長解釋，能尊重讀者時間。
弱點- 段落之間的轉折可以更自然
- 結尾可以加入一句簡短收束語
段落轉折：從稱讚雜誌到描述問題的轉換略突然。可在第二段開頭加上「However」或「Recently, I had an issue」讓語氣更順。
結尾收束：問題之後可加上「Thank you for your help.」這類簡短句子，使信件更完整、更有禮貌。
改進練習- 在第二段開頭加入一個轉折詞，並在結尾加入一句感謝。
- 用「背景 → 問題 → 請求」檢查每一句是否放在正確段落。
- 練習三種結尾：感謝、可配合提供資訊、期待回覆。
支持內容的相關性與品質
優點
- 所有細節都圍繞投稿問題
- 具體說明了行動與結果
- 清楚解釋困惑原因：沒有收到確認信
- 請求禮貌且與問題直接相關
內容集中：信件沒有加入不相關資訊，始終圍繞投稿、網站錯誤與確認狀態。
細節具體：你說明嘗試提交兩首詩、使用線上表單、按下提交後頁面出錯。這些步驟能幫助工作人員追查。
困惑原因清楚：沒有收到確認信是很重要的支持細節，能合理說明你為什麼擔心投稿沒有成功。
請求明確：最後的問題正好對應前文細節，要求確認投稿狀態，符合整封信的目的。
弱點- 部分描述不夠精確
- 事件順序可透過小幅修改更清楚
描述精確度：「show error and become blank」不夠自然，可改成「showed an error message and then the page went blank」。
時間順序：使用一致的過去式會更清楚，例如「After I uploaded my files and clicked the submit button, the page showed an error and became blank.」
改進練習- 用精確過去式重寫問題句，加入「error message」與「went blank」。
- 加入一個精確細節，例如日期，練習強化支持但不離題。
- 用「行動 → 系統反應 → 對你的結果」描述兩個類似技術問題。
文法使用
優點
- 雖有錯誤，但意思清楚
- 禮貌問句使用正確
意思清楚：即使有文法錯誤，讀者仍能理解情況與請求，主要想法完整。
禮貌問句正確：「Could you please tell me about the status of my submissions?」是正確且禮貌的問法，顯示你能使用情態助動詞與禮貌句型。
弱點- 主詞動詞一致與複數形式
- 過去事件需要一致使用過去式
- 冠詞與限定詞
- 介系詞與自然搭配
- 詞形與常見搭配
主詞動詞一致：「one of your reader」應改為「one of your readers」；「It make me more confidence」應改為「It makes me more confident」；「my poems was received」應改為「my poems were received」。
時態一致：已完成的動作應使用過去式，例如 uploaded、clicked、showed、became。
冠詞：需要加入 a/an/the，例如「a chance」、「the submit button」、「an error」。
介系詞：submit by the form 不自然，可用「through」或「via the online submission form」。
詞形：「confident」是形容詞，比「confidence」更適合用在 makes me more confident；「share their work」也比「share their works」自然。
改進練習- 練習修正主詞動詞一致，例如 It make → It makes、poems was → poems were。
- 用過去式重寫第二段。
- 為短名詞片語補上 a/an/the。
- 練習在投稿相關句子中選擇 through/via/by/with。
字彙使用
優點
- 禮貌用語合適
- 情感與主題字彙有效
- submission(s) 與 confirmation email 使用正確
禮貌用語：你使用「I hope you are fine」與「Could you please...」，適合正式信件。
主題字彙：poetry magazine、deep、emotional、inspired、peaceful 等字符合情境，也能表達你的感受。
專門用語：submission(s) 與 confirmation email 是此情境中合適且精確的詞。
弱點- 部分搭配不自然或錯誤
- 重複與較弱的強調詞
- 描述錯誤時缺少更精確的技術用語
搭配：「give chance」應為「give a chance」或「offer opportunities」；「more confidence」應為「more confident」；「share their works」通常改為「share their work」。
重複：「really like... very much」重複，可改成「I really enjoy your poetry magazine」。
技術用語：可用「showed an error message」、「went blank」或「crashed」更精確描述問題。
改進練習- 配對常見搭配：offer opportunities、submit via、receive confirmation、show an error message。
- 用 enjoy、appreciate、value 改寫 really like。
- 用 error message、blank page、crashed 寫三個版本的問題句。
連貫與銜接
優點
- 想法順序合理
- 有使用連接詞
- 因果關係清楚
- 段落短而易讀
順序合理：信件從背景開始，接著說明問題，最後提出請求，讓讀者能快速理解並回覆。
連接詞：because、Every time、After、so 等字呈現原因與時間順序。
因果清楚：頁面出錯且未收到確認信，因此不確定投稿是否成功，這個關係容易理解。
段落易讀：三個短段落適合螢幕閱讀，也讓每部分目的明確。
弱點- 部分連接詞不自然
- 時間順序可透過一致過去式更清楚
連接詞：「Every time when I read」不自然，可改為「Every time I read」或「When I read」。
時態順序：保持過去式能讓事件更清楚，例如「After I uploaded my files and clicked the submit button, the page showed an error and became blank.」
改進練習- 在信中加入或替換 However、Then、After that、Therefore。
- 用 so、because 或 after 合併兩個描述錯誤的短句。
- 分別用現在式與過去式重寫問題描述，比較哪個更清楚。
評分標準報告
任務完成度 5/5
任務完成度是指你回應題目的完整程度。TOEFL 評分者希望看到能直接回答問題、想法相關且發展充分的回應。完成任務代表完整回答題目的所有部分。
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整體組織 4/5
整體組織是指你如何安排作文中的想法，包括是否能運用基本文章結構，並圍繞主要想法組織不同段落。
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支持內容的相關性與品質 4/5
支持內容的相關性與品質是指作文內容與想法。內容應直接與題目相關，並有幾個主要想法支持你的觀點或立場；這些想法應具說服力。
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文法使用 2/5
文法使用是指你如何運用英文文法、句構與基本寫作規範。評分者希望看到你能正確使用已掌握的文法，並用多樣句型表達想法。
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字彙使用 3/5
字彙使用是指你如何運用英文詞彙。評分者希望看到你能正確、精準地使用不同字詞，並用廣泛詞彙幫助讀者理解。在整合寫作中，評分者也會看你是否能把聽力或閱讀中的新字詞融入寫作。
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連貫與銜接 4/5
連貫與銜接是指你如何整合想法並連接句子。評分者希望看到文章能自然地從一個想法推進到下一個想法，不讓讀者感到困惑。
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Your student organization is planning events next semester but lacks sufficient funds. You have an innovative fundraising idea that could meet the budget shortfall. Write to the organization’s treasurer to outline your proposal and request approval to proceed soon, please.
範例語法批改
The professor explain explains that the Chevalier was rich in assets, but poor in the cash, while he lived in Switzerland and had to occasionally borrow funds while waiting for its his assets to selling. Accordingly, sell. According to the professor, being low on cash fund funds is not the same as being financially poors. poor. However, in reading the reading, someone who borrowing borrows large of amounts of money could not be wealth, wealthy, therefore the Chevalier must have lied about his wealthy life in Switzerland.
The skepticism regards regarding the reliability of the recorded conversations with Voltaire is challenging challenged by the professor as well. She explains that, due to the habit of recording each conversation with Voltaire immediately afterward, the Chevalier was able to recall those discussions in detail even after several years had passing. passed.
Finally, the professor refute refutes the idea briber that bribery was how the Chevalier got out of prison. She point points out that because even the other prisoners who had better resources were unable to successfully bribe their way out of prison prison, it was very unlikely that bribery was how he escaped. Also, she notes the existences existence of government papers recording repair work done to the Chevalier's prison cell ceiling as strong evidence that his escaping escape from the prison was accurately recorded.
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Master the TOEFL Writing Email Task
In the TOEFL Writing "Write an Email" task, you will read a short situation and write an email to someone. Every email has a communicative purpose — a real reason for writing.
Based on official TOEFL questions, there are seven types of email prompts:
- Making an Inquiry or Request — ask for information, help, or a meeting
- Providing Feedback with Suggestions — share your experience and recommend improvements
- Organizing or Asking for Help — coordinate plans and recruit people to assist
- Expressing Appreciation — thank someone and discuss future plans
- Giving Advice — respond thoughtfully to a friend's question
- Applying or Volunteering — express interest in a role and present your qualifications
- Responding to a Concern — address someone's problem with empathy and alternatives
The prompt will give you three bullet points that tell you what to include. You must address all three. The same 3-move writing structure works for all seven types.
Length: about 100–130 words | Time: 7 minutes
What the Task Measures
Before you start writing, it helps to know exactly what ETS is grading you on. Your response is evaluated in three areas:
| Criterion | What It Means | What It Looks Like |
| Task Completion | Did you address all three bullet points with specific, relevant details? This is the most important criterion. If you skip a bullet point, your score drops significantly. | Describes the issue, explains the reaction, suggests the next step — all in one email. |
| Organization & Coherence | Does your email flow logically? Can the reader follow your ideas from beginning to end without getting confused? | Opening → main details → closing action. Ideas connect smoothly with transitions. |
| Language Use | Is your grammar accurate? Do you use varied vocabulary? Is the tone appropriate for the person you are writing to? | "Unfortunately," "I'd appreciate it if…," "To keep the session focused" — these show strong, natural English. |
Keep these three criteria in mind as you study the tips below. Every scoring decision comes back to these areas.
Tip 1: Use the 3-Move Structure
Every TOEFL email — no matter what the topic is — can be written using the same three moves. Think of them as the "skeleton" of your email:
| Move | What You Do | Helpful Phrases |
| 1. Introduce the Context | Start with a greeting. Then briefly state why you are writing. This sets the scene for the reader and usually covers part of the first bullet point. | "Thanks for…," "I'm writing to…," "I wanted to let you know…" |
| 2. Share Key Details | This is the main body of your email. Provide the facts, describe the situation, or explain your reaction. Cover the first two bullet points fully with specific details. | "Unfortunately,…" "On top of that,…" "To keep things focused,…" |
| 3. Propose Next Steps | End by suggesting a solution, making a request, or recommending what to do next. This covers the third bullet point. Close politely. | "Could you please…," "For next time,…" "If you'd like, I can…" |
Why does this work? Because it mirrors how real emails are written: you explain why you're writing, give the important details, and then tell the reader what you need. ETS rewards responses that follow this natural, logical flow.
Tip 2: Follow the 7-Minute Writing Strategy
Seven minutes is short. Without a plan, you may run out of time or forget a bullet point. Here is a step-by-step timing strategy:
| 0:00–0:40 | Read & Identify Purpose | Read the scenario and bullet points. Ask yourself: Am I recommending, inviting, or solving a problem? Who am I writing to — and how formal should I be? |
| 0:40–4:30 | Write the 3 Moves | Write your greeting and Move 1 (context). Then write Move 2 (details for bullet points 1 and 2). Then write Move 3 (next steps for bullet point 3). Add a closing phrase. |
| 4:30–6:30 | Check Bullet Points | Go back and compare your email to the three bullet points. Did you cover each one with specific details, not just vague statements? Add details where needed. |
| 6:30–7:00 | Polish Language & Tone | Fix any grammar or spelling mistakes. Add a transition word if two sentences feel disconnected. Make sure your opening and closing match the tone. |
Tip: Don't spend too long on the first sentence. Many students waste time trying to write the perfect opening. Just get your ideas down, then improve them during the polishing step.
Tip 3: Match your tone to the recipient
The tone of your email should match the relationship with the person you are writing to:
| Writing to someone you don't know (editor, manager, company) |
Use a formal tone. Greeting: "Dear Editor," "Dear Mr./Ms. [Last name]," Closing: "Sincerely," "Best regards," |
| Writing to classmates or acquaintances |
Use a semi-formal tone. Greeting: "Hi everyone," "Hello [First name]," Closing: "Best," "Looking forward to hearing from you," |
| Writing to a coworker or friend |
Use a friendly but clear tone. Greeting: "Hi [First name]," Closing: "Best," "Thanks," "Talk soon," |
Tip 4: Use varied and accurate language
High-scoring emails use accurate grammar, varied vocabulary, and natural transitions. Here are key areas to focus on:
- Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly: "Unfortunately," "On top of that," "If time permits," "To keep the session focused."
- Use polite request forms: "I would appreciate it if you could…," "Could you please…," "Would it be possible to…"
- Avoid repeating the same words – use synonyms and varied sentence structures.
- Be specific. Instead of "The restaurant was bad," write "The food lacked flavor, and several dishes arrived cold."
- Avoid slang, text abbreviations, or very casual expressions.
Lesson: Subject verb agreement rules
Lesson: Use the right article
Lesson: Relative pronouns and relative clauses
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Review Checklist Before You Submit
Before you submit your email, run through this checklist. It covers everything ETS is looking for in a 5/5 response:
| All bullet points covered | Did I address each of the three bullet points with specific details, not just vague statements? |
| Clear purpose | Would the reader immediately understand why I am writing and what I need? |
| Logical flow | Does my email follow a natural order: context → details → next steps? |
| Smooth transitions | Did I use linking words ("Unfortunately," "On top of that," "For next time") to connect my ideas? |
| Appropriate tone | Does my greeting and closing match the relationship? (formal for strangers, friendly for coworkers) |
| Grammar & spelling | Did I check for verb tense errors, subject-verb agreement, and spelling mistakes? |
| Word count | Is my email around 100–130 words? Not too short, not unnecessarily long? |
TOEFL Writing Email – Response Template
This template follows the 3-move structure. Replace the bracketed sections with your own content based on the prompt. It works for all seven question types.
Universal Template:Move 1 — Context: [State the reason you are writing. Connect it to the situation in the prompt. This often covers the first bullet point.]
Move 2 — Details: [Provide specific facts, descriptions, or reactions. Cover the first and second bullet points fully. Use transitions like "Unfortunately," "On top of that," or "In addition" to connect your ideas.]
Move 3 — Next Steps: [Suggest a solution, make a request, or recommend what to do next. This covers the third bullet point. End politely.]
[Closing phrase],
[Your Name]
Adapting the tone:
- Writing to someone you don't know (hotel manager, venue manager)? Use "Dear [Title/Name]," and "Best regards,"
- Writing to a professor? Use "Dear Professor [Name]," or "Dear Dr. [Name]," and "Thank you," or "Sincerely,"
- Writing to classmates or coworkers? Use "Hi everyone," or "Hi [Name]," and "Best," or "Thanks,"
Important: Do not memorize this template word for word. Practice using it with different prompts so that your response sounds natural and fits each specific situation.
Example 1: Making an Inquiry (Formal)
Write an email to Mei Lin, director of Harbor Learning Center. In your email, do the following:
- Explain how you learned about the center.
- Describe the workshop schedule and room needs.
- Ask about availability and rental fees.
Dear Mei Lin,
I am writing on behalf of our university robotics club. One of my classmates recommended Harbor Learning Center because her team held a workshop there last semester and had a very positive experience. We are planning a design workshop for visiting high school students on Saturday, October 12, from about 9:30 a.m. to 3:30 p.m. We would need two meeting rooms, projector access in at least one room, and enough space for around twenty participants and a few club volunteers. We expect to divide the students into small groups for part of the day, so having two separate rooms would be especially helpful. Could you please let me know whether the center is available on that date and what the rental fees would be? If there are any reservation rules or equipment charges, I would appreciate that information as well.
Best regards,
[Your Name]
How the 3 Moves Were Used
- Move 1 (Context): "I am writing on behalf of our university robotics club. One of my classmates recommended…" — explains the purpose and how they heard about the center (bullet point 1).
- Move 2 (Details): "We are planning a design workshop… two meeting rooms, projector access… around twenty participants…" — describes the schedule and specific room needs (bullet point 2).
- Move 3 (Next Steps): "Could you please let me know whether the center is available… rental fees… reservation rules or equipment charges" — asks for the information needed (bullet point 3).
Why It Scores 5/5
- Task Completion: all three bullet points are fully addressed with specific details.
- Organization: smooth flow from introduction → needs → polite request.
- Language: formal and appropriate — "on behalf of," "a very positive experience," "I would appreciate that information as well."
- Tone: professional and courteous — perfect for a business inquiry.
Example 2: Providing Feedback with Suggestions (Semi-Formal)
Write an email to Ms. Benson. In your email, do the following:
- Mention what you liked about the open house.
- Explain the problems you noticed during the event.
- Offer suggestions that could improve future open houses.
Dear Ms. Benson,
I recently attended the open house at the new community makerspace, and I wanted to share a few comments. I really enjoyed the demonstrations, especially the 3D-printing and laser-cutting activities, and the staff members were welcoming and patient when visitors asked questions. The event gave a strong first impression of the space. I did notice a couple of problems, though. Some of the labels on the tools were difficult to understand, especially for visitors who were completely new to the equipment. In addition, the waiting line for the 3D-printing stations became very long during the busiest part of the event, so some people seemed unsure whether they would get a turn. For future open houses, it might help to use larger, clearer labels with brief descriptions of what each tool does. A sign-up sheet or timed demonstration schedule for the 3D printers could also reduce confusion and make the line move more smoothly.
Best regards,
[Your Name]
How the 3 Moves Were Used
- Move 1 (Context): "I recently attended the open house… I really enjoyed the demonstrations…" — establishes why they are writing and what they enjoyed (bullet point 1).
- Move 2 (Details): "Some of the labels on the tools were difficult to understand… the waiting line… became very long…" — describes specific issues with details (bullet point 2).
- Move 3 (Next Steps): "it might help to use larger, clearer labels… A sign-up sheet or timed demonstration schedule…" — offers practical improvement suggestions (bullet point 3).
Why It Scores 5/5
- Task Completion: praises the event, explains the problems with specific detail, and offers concrete solutions.
- Organization: positive → negative → constructive suggestion. A natural and diplomatic flow.
- Language: varied and precise — "completely new to the equipment," "seemed unsure," "reduce confusion."
- Cohesion: smooth transitions — "I did notice a couple of problems, though," "In addition," "For future open houses."
Example 3: Responding to a Concern (Friendly)
Write an email to Nina. In your email, do the following:
- Acknowledge her concern in a polite way.
- Explain why the club cannot change the topic now.
- Suggest online resources that may help her practice interviewing on her own.
Dear Nina,
Thank you for writing and for sharing your concern. I understand why interview practice feels especially important to you right now, and I appreciate you letting me know what kind of support would be most useful. Unfortunately, we cannot change next month's training topic at this point because the room reservation, speaker plan, and printed handouts have already been arranged for the resume-writing session. Making a change now would create confusion and would likely waste resources that are already prepared. However, I still want to help you prepare for interviews. The university career center has sample interview questions on its website, and there are also several free mock-interview videos and practice tools online. If you would like, I can send you a short list of resources that I think are especially useful.
Best regards,
[Your Name]
How the 3 Moves Were Used
- Move 1 (Context): "Thank you for writing and for sharing your concern. I understand why interview practice feels especially important…" — acknowledges the concern with empathy (bullet point 1).
- Move 2 (Details): "the room reservation, speaker plan, and printed handouts have already been arranged… would create confusion…" — explains clearly why the topic cannot be changed (bullet point 2).
- Move 3 (Next Steps): "The university career center has sample interview questions… free mock-interview videos and practice tools…" — suggests specific, helpful resources (bullet point 3).
Why It Scores 5/5
- Task Completion: shows empathy, gives a clear reason for declining, and offers multiple specific resources.
- Organization: understanding → explanation → helpful alternatives. Diplomatic and supportive.
- Language: warm and natural — "I still want to help you prepare," "I think are especially useful."
- Tone: friendly and encouraging — perfect for a fellow student.