TOEFL® Writing Practice 68

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For this task, you will write an essay in response to a question that asks you to state, explain, and support your opinion on an issue. You'll have 30 minutes to write your essay.

Typically, an effective essay will contain a minimum of 350 words.

We recommend you practice organizing your essay for the first 5 minutes with a pen and paper like you will during your TOEFL exam.

Question: Your city has decided to build a statue or monument to honor a famous person in your country. Who would you choose? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.
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Question: Your city has decided to build a statue or monument to honor a famous person in your country. Who would you choose? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

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Sample Essay

If my city were to build a statue or monument to a famous person I would highly encourage it to be in honor of Theodore Roosevelt. As president, he worked to preserve much of the natural land of the United States, of which my state has much. Similarly, he strove to protect workers rights through unions, such as the extensive mining industry of my state. All in all he embodied the traits and character of the old west, a personality important to the creation of my state. Theodore Roosevelt is a man who worked hard to create and maintain the unique character of my state, Colorado.

The first great work Theodore Roosevelt did for my state was pushing for the creation of National Parks and National Forests. Currently, Colorado has four National Parks and is dominated by National Forests. These spaces preserve much of the natural beauty of the Rocky Mountains and allow millions of people to enjoy the rustic wilds of Colorado. This action also helped to protect many animals and plants that might otherwise be under threat from overpopulation and industrialization.

Additionally, Roosevelt helped to secure the power of the nations union workers, such as the thousands of miners working in Colorado. Many of the first inhabitants of my city and state were miners hoping to make a living and establish permanent communities in Colorado. Without the security of unions those men would not have been able to maintain their existence in Colorado. Roosevelt thus created and helped maintain the source of my states population and initial livelihood. We owe our very existence as a state to the work of this man.

Overall, Theodore Roosevelt was a man who loved and embodied the values of the western states. He was an avid adventurer, hiking, and rafting through the Rocky Mountains. He loved camping and hunting big game as well. This adventurous rough and tumble lifestyle encapsulates the character of Colorado as well as other western states. Not only did he work hard to protect the natural beauty and work interests of our people, but also at the same time, he strove to be like the people of the west. Teddy Roosevelt was in essence one of us.

    For these reasons, I would promote the idea of my city building a statue or monument in honor of Theodore Roosevelt. He aspired to protect the wildlife and natural environment of our state. Also, he struggled to reserve protection for many people‚Äôs jobs and rights. He was a man who loved and embraced the way of life of many people in the Rocky Mountains, seeking to preserve a unique lifestyle. Theodore Roosevelt would be an outstanding candidate for memorialization in my city.

Learn How to Tackle TOEFL Independent Writing - Preference Essays
Tip 1: Follow a standard TOEFL essay structure
Introductory Paragraph 1. Provide background information about the essay topic. Here are a few techniques:
  1. Begin with two sides of opinions on the essay topic
  2. Begin with the general public's opinions
  3. Introduce a fact that raises a question about the essay topic
  4. Introduce a debate on the essay topic
  5. Mention the advantage or disadvantage of a subject as a way to contrast
  6. your main opinion on the subject.

2. Write a strong thesis statement

Lesson: How to write a high-scoring TOEFL introductory paragraph part 1
Lesson: How to write a high-scoring TOEFL introductory paragraph part 2
Body Paragraph A
Body Paragraph B
Body Paragraph C (Optional)
1. Include a transition word/phrase at the beginning
2. Write a topic sentence
3. Include supporting sentences

Lesson: How to write a high-scoring TOEFL body paragraph
Conclusion Paragraph 1. Include a restatement of the thesis statement you wrote in your introduction
2. Provide a brief summary of your main ideas

Lesson: How to write a high-scoring TOEFL conclusion paragraph

There's no maximum length for your essay, but a good response is usually at least 300 words.

Tip 2: Use transition words and phrases

You need to use transition words and phrases to connect your ideas in your essay. You should have 2 transition words/phrases every 4-5 sentences.

Type of connection Transition words
These words can help you show the order of ideas. First/Second/Third
Firstly (or "First of all")/Secondly/Thirdly (or "Lastly")
For one thing/For another thing/Finally (or "Lastly")
In the first place/in the second place/Finally (or "Lastly")

Instead of "First", "First of all" and "Firstly", we can use "To begin with", "To start with", or "For starters". We can also use "First and foremost" to state that the first key point is the most important one among all key points.

Likewise, instead of "Finally" and "Lastly", we can use "Last but not least" to state that the final key point is just as important as the others, despite it being mentioned last.

These words can help you add information In addition, furthermore, additionally, also, next, moreover, what's more, on top of that
These words can help you conclude or to summarize: To sum up, in summary, in conclusion, to conclude, all in all, all things considered ,overall, taking everything into consideration, in a nutshell
These words can help you demonstrate contrast Conversely, on the contrary, by contrast, by way of contrast, on one hand/on the other hand
These words can help you compare or demonstrate similarity Similarly, likewise, by the same token, along similar lines
These words can help you state a result. As a result, as a consequence, consequently, therefore
These words can help you state a generalization. Generally, on the whole, in most cases, in general
These words can help you clarify a point. That is, in other words, to put it simply, That is to say, just to reiterate
These words can help you give examples. For example, for instance, take something, for example, to give a clear example
These words can help you state an alternative. Alternatively, as another possibility
Tip 3: Vary your sentence structure

To achieve a higher score or a perfect 5 out of 5 on the TOEFL English language criteria, you must show that you can accurately and flexibly use a variety of structures.

Lesson: Achieving sentence variety part 1
Lesson: Achieving sentence variety part 2
Lesson: Achieving sentence variety part 3
Tip 5: Vary your vocabulary

You should avoid using the same vocabulary throughout your essay. Instead, you can use synonyms or phrases that have the same meaning of words.

Here are some ways you can improve on this area:

  1. Read our sample essays and pay attention to words you are not familiar with.
  2. Utilize our TOEFL Vocabulary system
  3. Utilize our TOEFL synonyms exercises
 
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