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The Writing Task 2 of the IELTS Academic/General test requires you to write an essay in response to a point of view, argument or problem. You will be presented with a topic and will be tested on your ability to respond by giving and justifying an opinion, discussing the topic, summarizing details, outlining problems, identifying possible solutions and supporting what you write with reasons, arguments and relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

  • - Write in a formal style
  • - Write at least 250 words
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Write about the following topic:

The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Write about the following topic:
The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


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Obesity among children has risen sharply over the last decade in western countries.  Such a trend is largely the result of a tendency towards convenience in society, yet its effects may be detrimental to children’s long-term mental and physical health.

The prime causes of obesity are unhealthy eating habits and an inactive lifestyle.  In recent years, there has been a surge in the consumption of convenience foods among modern families.   Busy parents with no time to cook rely on prepared meals to feed their families.  Such foods have little to no nutritional value which contributes to obesity.  In addition, children these days spend inordinate amounts of time playing video games than playing outside with friends resulting in insufficient physical activity each day.  For example, studies show that children in France exercise on average around 20 minutes per day as compared to 75 minutes 30 years ago.  

The possible effects of obesity are a range of health issues.  Regarding physical health, diseases, such as type 2 diabetes and high blood pressure, are known to be higher in overweight children than their peers.  These put a child’s life in danger, and may further affect mental health growing up.  When children are obese, they are more likely to be bullied and ostracized by classmates because they look or behave differently.  This has been known to cause low self-esteem and depression in many, and thus shun friends in favor of time alone.

In conclusion, through poor diet choice and inactivity, obesity is a growing problem that can cause lasting damage to a child’s mental and physical development.   However, by addressing this problem while young, much can be done to aid a child in becoming a healthy functioning adult.



Essay Planning

Type: Cause and Effect

  1. What is the topic of the question?
  2. How many questions are there?
  3. How many sides do you need to consider?  

The question is about the number of overweight children increasing in the western world.

There is only one question, but both the causes and effects need to be discussed.

Plan:

  1. Analyse the question.
  2. Brainstorm a number of main points that you wish to talk about
  3. Choose which points you wish to use and think of two supporting details for each
  4. Decide on the order of your main points before writing.

Thesis

Convenience trend , long term physical, mental effects

Causes

Rise in consumption of convenience foods

  • Busy parents, no time to cook
  • Little to no nutritional value, causes obesity

Lack of exercise

  • rather play video games
  • longer hours in front of video screen
  • insufficient activity every day
  • Example – children exercise in France

Effects

Physical health issues

  • Modern diseases (diabetes, high blood pressure)
  • Life in danger, mental health issues

Mental health issues

  • Obesity causes bullying
  • More susceptible to low self-esteem, depression

Plan Practice:

Look at the main points above and write down the supporting details for each one.

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Essay Grammar Corrections & Improvements
Several doubt about the accuracy of the memoir writting by the Chevalier de Seingalt are raised in the reading but the professor clarify the seeming contradictions in the Chevalier's accounts to defend the memoir.

The professor explain that the Chevalier rich in assets, but poor in the cash, while he lived in Switzerland and had to occasionally borrow funds while waiting for its assets to selling. Accordingly, to the professor, being low on cash fund is not same as being financially poors. However, in reading someone who borrowing large of amounts of money could not be wealth, therefore the Chevalier must have lied his wealthy life in Switzerland.

The skepticism regards the reliability of the recorded conversations with Voltaire is challenging by the professor as well. She explains that, due to habit of recording each conversation with Voltaire immediately afterward, the Chevalier was able to recall those discussions in detail even after several years had passing.

Finally, the professor refute the idea briber was how the Chevalier got out of prison. She point out that because even the other prisoners who had better resources were unable to successfully bribe their way out of prison it was very unlikely that bribery was how he escaped. Also, she notes the existences of government papers recording repair work done to the Chevalier's prison cell ceiling as strong evidence that his escaping from the prison was accurately recorded.
Several doubt doubts about the accuracy of the memoir writting written by the Chevalier de Seingalt are raised in the reading reading, but the professor clarify clarifies the seeming contradictions in the Chevalier's accounts to defend the memoir.

The professor explain explains that the Chevalier was rich in assets, but poor in the cash, while he lived in Switzerland and had to occasionally borrow funds while waiting for its his assets to selling. Accordingly, sell. According to the professor, being low on cash fund funds is not the same as being financially poors. poor. However, in reading the reading, someone who borrowing borrows large of amounts of money could not be wealth, wealthy, therefore the Chevalier must have lied about his wealthy life in Switzerland.

The skepticism regards regarding the reliability of the recorded conversations with Voltaire is challenging challenged by the professor as well. She explains that, due to the habit of recording each conversation with Voltaire immediately afterward, the Chevalier was able to recall those discussions in detail even after several years had passing. passed.

Finally, the professor refute refutes the idea briber that bribery was how the Chevalier got out of prison. She point points out that because even the other prisoners who had better resources were unable to successfully bribe their way out of prison prison, it was very unlikely that bribery was how he escaped. Also, she notes the existences existence of government papers recording repair work done to the Chevalier's prison cell ceiling as strong evidence that his escaping escape from the prison was accurately recorded.



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doubt
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doubts The correct form is 'doubts' because it is a plural noun in this context.

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writting
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written The correct past participle of 'write' is 'written'.

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reading
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reading, A comma is needed after 'reading' to separate the two independent clauses.

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clarify
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clarifies The third person singular form of the verb 'clarify' is 'clarifies'.

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explain
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explains The third person singular form of the verb 'explain' is 'explains'.

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was
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was The verb 'was' is needed to indicate the past tense.

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the
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The article 'the' is not needed before 'Chevalier'.

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its
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his The correct possessive pronoun is 'his' as it refers to 'Chevalier'.

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selling. Accordingly,
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sell. According The correct verb form is 'sell'. Also, 'According' should start a new sentence.

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fund
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funds The correct noun is 'funds'.

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the
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the The article 'the' is needed before 'Chevalier'.

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poors.
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poor. The correct adjective is 'poor'.

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reading
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the reading, The article 'the' is needed before 'reading' and a comma is needed after it.

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borrowing
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borrows The correct verb form is 'borrows'.

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of
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The preposition 'of' is not needed in this context.

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wealth,
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wealthy, The correct adjective is 'wealthy'.

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about
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about The preposition 'about' is needed before 'his wealthy life'.

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regards
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regarding The correct preposition is 'regarding'.

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challenging
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challenged The correct past participle of 'challenge' is 'challenged'.

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the
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the The article 'the' is needed before 'professor'.

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passing.
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passed. The correct past participle of 'pass' is 'passed'.

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refute
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refutes The third person singular form of the verb 'refute' is 'refutes'.

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briber
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that bribery The correct noun is 'bribery'.

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point
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points The third person singular form of the verb 'point' is 'points'.

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prison
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prison, A comma is needed after 'prison' to separate the two independent clauses.

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existences
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existence The correct noun is 'existence'.

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escaping
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escape The correct noun is 'escape'.

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accuracy
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veracity The professor challenges the veracity of the memoir written by the Chevalier de Seingalt.

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written
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penned The professor clarifies the seeming contradictions in the Chevalier's accounts to defend the memoir that he penned.

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clarifies
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elucidates The professor elucidates the seeming contradictions in the Chevalier's accounts to defend the memoir.

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seeming
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apparent The professor elucidates the apparent contradictions in the Chevalier's accounts to defend the memoir.

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explains
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clarifies The professor clarifies that the Chevalier was rich in assets, but poor in cash, while he lived in Switzerland and had to occasionally borrow funds while waiting for his assets to sell.

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rich
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wealthy The professor clarifies that the Chevalier was wealthy in assets, but poor in cash, while he lived in Switzerland and had to occasionally borrow funds while waiting for his assets to sell.

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poor in cash,
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cash-poor, The professor clarifies that the Chevalier was wealthy in assets, but cash-poor, while he lived in Switzerland and had to occasionally borrow funds while waiting for his assets to sell.

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lived
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resided The professor clarifies that the Chevalier resided in Switzerland while he had to occasionally borrow funds while waiting for his assets to sell.

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sell.
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liquidate. The professor clarifies that the Chevalier had to occasionally borrow funds while waiting for his assets to liquidate.

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funds
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The professor clarifies that the Chevalier had to occasionally borrow while waiting for his assets to liquidate.

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the same as
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synonymous with The professor explains that being low on cash funds is not synonymous with being financially poor.

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amounts
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sums In the reading, someone who borrows large sums of money could not be wealthy, therefore the Chevalier must have lied about his wealthy life in Switzerland.

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wealthy,
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affluent, In the reading, someone who borrows large sums of money could not be affluent, therefore the Chevalier must have lied about his affluent life in Switzerland.

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lied about
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misrepresented In the reading, someone who borrows large sums of money could not be affluent, therefore the Chevalier must have misrepresented his affluent life in Switzerland.

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challenged
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contested The professor contests the skepticism regarding the reliability of the recorded conversations with Voltaire.

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habit
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practice The professor explains that it was the Chevalier's practice to record each conversation with Voltaire immediately afterward.

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recording
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documenting The professor explains that it was the Chevalier's practice to document each conversation with Voltaire immediately afterward.

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passed.
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elapsed. The professor explains that even after several years had elapsed, the Chevalier was able to recall those discussions in detail.

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refutes
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disputes The professor disputes the idea that bribery was how the Chevalier got out of prison.

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idea
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notion The professor disputes the notion that bribery was how the Chevalier got out of prison.

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got out of
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secured his release from The professor disputes the notion that bribery was how the Chevalier secured his release from prison.

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points out
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highlights The professor highlights that even the other prisoners who had better resources were unable to successfully bribe their way out of prison.

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because
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since The professor highlights that since even the other prisoners who had better resources were unable to successfully bribe their way out of prison, it was very unlikely that bribery was how the Chevalier escaped.

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who had better
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with superior The professor highlights that even the other prisoners with superior resources were unable to successfully bribe their way out of prison.

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very
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highly The professor highlights that even the other prisoners with superior resources were highly unlikely to successfully bribe their way out of prison.

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how he escaped. Also,
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his method of escape. Additionally, The professor disputes the notion that bribery was how the Chevalier secured his release from prison. Additionally, she notes the existence of government papers recording repair work done to the Chevalier's prison cell ceiling as compelling evidence that his escape from the prison was accurately recorded.

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notes
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cites The professor cites the existence of government papers recording repair work done to the Chevalier's prison cell ceiling as compelling evidence that his escape from the prison was accurately recorded.

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papers recording
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documents noting The professor cites the existence of documents noting repair work done to the Chevalier's prison cell ceiling as compelling evidence that his escape from the prison was accurately recorded.

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strong
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compelling The professor cites the existence of documents noting repair work done to the Chevalier's prison cell ceiling as compelling evidence that his escape from the prison was accurately recorded.

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recorded.
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documented. The professor cites the existence of documents noting repair work done to the Chevalier's prison cell ceiling as compelling evidence that his escape from the prison was accurately documented.
SAMPLE Criteria Score Reports

Task Achievement   7/9

• covers the requirements of the task
• presents a clear purpose, with the tone consistent and appropriate
• clearly presents and highlights key features/bullet points but could be more fully extended

Task achievement is about how well you present a clear overview of main trends, the main features, and comparisons where relevant. IELTS raters are looking for a response that answers these three aspects directly, with relevant ideas that are fully developed.

How to Improve

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Grammatical Range and Accuracy   5/9

• uses only a limited range of structures
• attempts complex sentences but these tend to be less accurate than simple sentences
• may make frequent grammatical errors and punctuation may be faulty; errors can cause some difficulty for the reader

Grammatical Range and Accuracy is about how you use English grammar, sentence structure, and the basic conventions of writing. Raters want to see that you can use what you know correctly, and that you can use a wide variety of structures to express your ideas.

How to Improve

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Lexical Resource (Vocabulary)    6/9

• uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task
• attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy
• makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede communication

Lexical Resource (Vocabulary) is about how you use English words. Raters are looking for writing that uses different words correctly and accurately, and that uses a wide range of words that help readers understand.

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To improve your vocabulary in the Academic Discussion Writing task, we recommend you study...

Coherence & Cohesion    4/9

• presents information and ideas but these are not arranged coherently andthere is no clear progression in the response
• uses some basic cohesive devices but these may be inaccurate or repetitive
• may not write in paragraphs or their use may be confusing

Coherence and connections are about how you put your ideas together and link different sentences to each other. Raters want to see sentences that flow smoothly from idea to idea without confusing the reader.

How to Improve

Complete the following lessons:

SAMPLE Essay Grammar Corrections & Improvements
Several doubt about the accuracy of the memoir writting by the Chevalier de Seingalt are raised in the reading but the professor clarify the seeming contradictions in the Chevalier's accounts to defend the memoir.

The professor explain that the Chevalier rich in assets, but poor in the cash, while he lived in Switzerland and had to occasionally borrow funds while waiting for its assets to selling. Accordingly, to the professor, being low on cash fund is not same as being financially poors. However, in reading someone who borrowing large of amounts of money could not be wealth, therefore the Chevalier must have lied his wealthy life in Switzerland.

The skepticism regards the reliability of the recorded conversations with Voltaire is challenging by the professor as well. She explains that, due to habit of recording each conversation with Voltaire immediately afterward, the Chevalier was able to recall those discussions in detail even after several years had passing.

Finally, the professor refute the idea briber was how the Chevalier got out of prison. She point out that because even the other prisoners who had better resources were unable to successfully bribe their way out of prison it was very unlikely that bribery was how he escaped. Also, she notes the existences of government papers recording repair work done to the Chevalier's prison cell ceiling as strong evidence that his escaping from the prison was accurately recorded.
Several doubt doubts about the accuracy of the memoir writting written by the Chevalier de Seingalt are raised in the reading reading, but the professor clarify clarifies the seeming contradictions in the Chevalier's accounts to defend the memoir.

The professor explain explains that the Chevalier was rich in assets, but poor in the cash, while he lived in Switzerland and had to occasionally borrow funds while waiting for its his assets to selling. Accordingly, sell. According to the professor, being low on cash fund funds is not the same as being financially poors. poor. However, in reading the reading, someone who borrowing borrows large of amounts of money could not be wealth, wealthy, therefore the Chevalier must have lied about his wealthy life in Switzerland.

The skepticism regards regarding the reliability of the recorded conversations with Voltaire is challenging challenged by the professor as well. She explains that, due to the habit of recording each conversation with Voltaire immediately afterward, the Chevalier was able to recall those discussions in detail even after several years had passing. passed.

Finally, the professor refute refutes the idea briber that bribery was how the Chevalier got out of prison. She point points out that because even the other prisoners who had better resources were unable to successfully bribe their way out of prison prison, it was very unlikely that bribery was how he escaped. Also, she notes the existences existence of government papers recording repair work done to the Chevalier's prison cell ceiling as strong evidence that his escaping escape from the prison was accurately recorded.



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doubt
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doubts The plural form 'doubts' is needed here because there are multiple uncertainties being discussed.

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writting
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written The correct past participle of 'write' is 'written'.

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reading
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reading, A comma is needed after 'reading' to separate the two independent clauses.

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clarify
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clarifies The third person singular form 'clarifies' is needed to agree with the singular subject 'professor'.

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explain
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explains The third person singular form 'explains' is needed to agree with the singular subject 'professor'.

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was
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was The verb 'was' is needed to form the past continuous tense.

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the
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The article 'the' is not needed before 'assets'.

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its
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his The possessive pronoun 'his' is needed to refer back to 'the Chevalier'.

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selling. Accordingly,
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sell. According The verb 'sell' is needed here, and 'According' should start a new sentence.

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fund
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funds The plural form 'funds' is needed here because it refers to money in general.

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the
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the The article 'the' is needed before 'Chevalier'.

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poors.
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poor. The correct adjective form is 'poor'.

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reading
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the reading, The article 'the' is needed before 'reading', and a comma is needed to separate the two independent clauses.

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borrowing
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borrows The present simple tense 'borrows' is needed to describe a general situation.

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of
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The preposition 'of' is not needed here.

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wealth,
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wealthy, The adjective 'wealthy' is needed to describe 'the Chevalier'.

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about
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about The preposition 'about' is needed to introduce the topic of the sentence.

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regards
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regarding The preposition 'regarding' is needed to introduce the topic of the sentence.

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challenging
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challenged The past participle 'challenged' is needed to form the passive voice.

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the
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the The article 'the' is needed before 'Chevalier'.

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passing.
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passed. The past participle 'passed' is needed to form the past perfect tense.

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refute
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refutes The third person singular form 'refutes' is needed to agree with the singular subject 'professor'.

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briber
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that bribery The noun 'bribery' is needed to refer to the act of giving bribes.

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point
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points The third person singular form 'points' is needed to agree with the singular subject 'she'.

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prison
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prison, A comma is needed after 'prison' to separate the two independent clauses.

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existences
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existence The singular form 'existence' is needed because it refers to one specific thing.

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escaping
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escape The noun 'escape' is needed to refer to the act of escaping.
Revision Exercise
Each sentence in the report below contains one or two errors. Errors may be grammar or punctuation based. Do your best correct the errors. You can edit the paragraph below. Click "Show answers" to view the corrected paragraph.

The possible effects of obesity are range of health issues.  Physical health, diseases, such type 2 diabites and high blood pressure, are known to be higher in overweight children than there peers.  These put a child’s life in danger. These may further affect mental health growing up. When children is obese they are more likely to be bullied and ostrasisized by classmates because they look or behave differently.  This has been known to cause low self-esteem and depression in many. Thus they shun friend in favor of time alone.

In conclusion, through poor diet choice and inactivity, obesity is a growing problem that can cause lasting damage to child’s mental and physical development.   Addressing this problem while young, much can be done to aid a child in becoming a healthy functioning adult.

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