Many people in society believe that having fixed punishments for all crimes is a more efficient way of dealing with criminals in the justice system. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a fixed punishment?
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The professor explain explains that the Chevalier was rich in assets, but poor in the cash, while he lived in Switzerland and had to occasionally borrow funds while waiting for its his assets to selling. Accordingly, sell. According to the professor, being low on cash fund funds is not the same as being financially poors. poor. However, in reading the reading, someone who borrowing borrows large of amounts of money could not be wealth, wealthy, therefore the Chevalier must have lied about his wealthy life in Switzerland.
The skepticism regards regarding the reliability of the recorded conversations with Voltaire is challenging challenged by the professor as well. She explains that, due to the habit of recording each conversation with Voltaire immediately afterward, the Chevalier was able to recall those discussions in detail even after several years had passing. passed.
Finally, the professor refute refutes the idea briber that bribery was how the Chevalier got out of prison. She point points out that because even the other prisoners who had better resources were unable to successfully bribe their way out of prison prison, it was very unlikely that bribery was how he escaped. Also, she notes the existences existence of government papers recording repair work done to the Chevalier's prison cell ceiling as strong evidence that his escaping escape from the prison was accurately recorded.
Task Fulfillment
The essay does a good job of comparing the content between the reading and the lecture. It addresses all the main points raised in the reading and provides the professor's counterarguments. However, the essay could have done a better job of integrating the two sources of information and providing a more balanced discussion.
Relevance & Completeness of Information
The essay includes all the necessary information from both the reading and the lecture. However, it could have provided more details from the reading to better contrast with the professor's points.
Grammatical Usage
There are several grammatical errors throughout the essay. For example, 'Several doubt about the accuracy' should be 'Several doubts about the accuracy', 'the Chevalier rich in assets' should be 'the Chevalier was rich in assets', 'being low on cash fund is not same as being financially poors' should be 'being low on cash is not the same as being financially poor'.
Vocabulary Usage
The vocabulary used in the essay is adequate, but there are some incorrect word choices. For example, 'briber' should be 'bribery', 'its assets to selling' should be 'his assets to sell'.
Connections & Coherence
The essay is generally coherent, but the flow of ideas could be improved. The transitions between the different points could be smoother, and the essay could have done a better job of connecting the professor's points to the reading.
Connection between Lecture & Reading
The essay does a good job of connecting the lecture to the reading. It clearly shows how the professor's points counter the doubts raised in the reading. However, the essay could have done a better job of integrating the two sources of information.
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Task Achievement 7/9
• presents a clear purpose, with the tone consistent and appropriate
• clearly presents and highlights key features/bullet points but could be more fully extended
Task achievement is about how well you present a clear overview of main trends, the main features, and comparisons where relevant. IELTS raters are looking for a response that answers these three aspects directly, with relevant ideas that are fully developed.
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Grammatical Range and Accuracy 5/9
• attempts complex sentences but these tend to be less accurate than simple sentences
• may make frequent grammatical errors and punctuation may be faulty; errors can cause some difficulty for the reader
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Lexical Resource (Vocabulary) 6/9
• attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy
• makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede communication
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Coherence & Cohesion 4/9
• uses some basic cohesive devices but these may be inaccurate or repetitive
• may not write in paragraphs or their use may be confusing
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SAMPLE Essay Grammar Corrections & Improvements
The professor explain explains that the Chevalier was rich in assets, but poor in the cash, while he lived in Switzerland and had to occasionally borrow funds while waiting for its his assets to selling. Accordingly, sell. According to the professor, being low on cash fund funds is not the same as being financially poors. poor. However, in reading the reading, someone who borrowing borrows large of amounts of money could not be wealth, wealthy, therefore the Chevalier must have lied about his wealthy life in Switzerland.
The skepticism regards regarding the reliability of the recorded conversations with Voltaire is challenging challenged by the professor as well. She explains that, due to the habit of recording each conversation with Voltaire immediately afterward, the Chevalier was able to recall those discussions in detail even after several years had passing. passed.
Finally, the professor refute refutes the idea briber that bribery was how the Chevalier got out of prison. She point points out that because even the other prisoners who had better resources were unable to successfully bribe their way out of prison prison, it was very unlikely that bribery was how he escaped. Also, she notes the existences existence of government papers recording repair work done to the Chevalier's prison cell ceiling as strong evidence that his escaping escape from the prison was accurately recorded.
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