IELTSGeneral Writingఅభ్యాసం4

• The letter answers all three main points from the task.
• The writer gives clear needs about the home and the area.
• The purpose of the letter is easy to understand from the start.

The opening explains the situation clearly: “I come to this city for work” and “My wife and two children come with me together.” This covers the first task point, because the writer introduces both himself and his family. The reader can quickly understand who will live in the home.

The second task point is also covered. The writer asks for “one floor in a tall building,” says “The apartment must be lower than 10 years old,” and adds that public service should be good. These details help the agent know what kind of accommodation to look for.

The location point is also clear. The writer wants a place “near my working space,” “good elementary school,” “near subway station and shopping mall,” and near a park. This gives the agent useful direction.

• Some ideas are not fully developed, so the agent still has to guess some details.
• A few requests are unclear or not well explained.
• The tone is mostly suitable, but some lines sound a little direct or unnatural for a formal request.

Although all bullet points are included, some parts need more support. For example, “one floor in a tall building is better” tells the type of home, but it does not explain size clearly. The agent still does not know how many bedrooms or bathrooms the family needs. A simple line like “We need a three-bedroom apartment with two bathrooms” would make the request more complete.

Some details are hard to understand. The line “I don’t want to pay attention on house fixing and neighborhood” does not clearly show the exact request. It seems the writer wants a well-kept home in a safe, quiet area, but this is not said directly. In IELTS Task Achievement, clear requests help the reader respond better.

The price point is extra information, and it is useful, but the main task asked more about home type and location. The writer could use that space to add missing details such as home size, rent range, or move-in date.

A few phrases sound too strong, such as “please check the neighbor quality.” In a formal letter, a softer request works better. For example: “I would also prefer a quiet and safe neighbourhood.”

• Practice writing one full sentence for each bullet point in the task before adding extra details.
• Practice adding two specific details about the home itself, such as size, number of rooms, or building type.
• Rewrite direct requests into polite formal requests.

Exercise 1: Take a task like this and write only three sentences first. Example: “I am moving for work with my wife and two children. We are looking for a three-bedroom apartment in a modern building. We would prefer an area near downtown, a good school, and public transport.” This helps you fully answer every point.

Exercise 2: Make a small checklist for accommodation details: bedrooms, bathrooms, building type, age, budget, and move-in date. Then use at least four in your letter.

Exercise 3: Change strong lines into polite ones. For example, change “check the neighbor quality” to “I would appreciate a home in a quiet and safe neighbourhood.”

• The writer uses several sentence types, not only very short simple sentences.
• There is some correct grammar in parts of the letter.
• Meaning is usually clear even when grammar is not fully correct.

The letter includes simple statements and longer sentences with linking words. For example, “In addition, if there is park near the location, it will be nice” shows an if-clause. Another example is “Although the convenience in downtown must be great...” This shows some range, because the writer tries more than one grammar pattern.

Some basic sentences are accurate enough, such as “My office is in downtown” and “Price is not a concern.” These help the message stay understandable.

Even when grammar mistakes appear, the reader can usually follow the meaning. This is important in IELTS, because communication still happens.

• There are frequent mistakes with verb forms and sentence structure.
• Articles, prepositions, and noun forms are often incorrect.
• Some sentences are joined badly, which causes punctuation problems.

Verb use is a common problem. The writer says “I come to this city for work” and “My wife and two children come with me together.” Because this move is planned, better forms would be “I am coming to this city for work” or “I will be moving to this city for work,” and “My wife and two children will come with me.”

Articles are often missing. For example, “good elementary school” should be “a good elementary school,” and “if there is park” should be “if there is a park.” Small grammar words like these matter in this criterion.

Prepositions are also weak. “Near my working space” is understandable, but “near my workplace” is more correct. “Pay attention on house fixing” should be “pay attention to house repairs,” and “in downtown” is better as “downtown” or “in the downtown area,” depending on the sentence.

Some sentences are run together with commas. This appears in “I come to this city for work, to help my company build a new factory in here, I plan to stay one year.” This needs better control. You could split it like this: “I am moving to your city for work. I will help my company build a new factory there, and I plan to stay for one year.”

There are also problems with word form and agreement, such as “recommand” and “accomadation,” but those also affect grammar when they interrupt sentence accuracy.

• Practice present, future, and planned-action forms for letter writing.
• Do short drills on articles and prepositions.
• Practice splitting long sentences into two clear sentences.

Exercise 1: Rewrite five sentences about future plans. Example: change “I come to this city for work” to “I am moving to this city for work” and “My family come with me” to “My family will come with me.”

Exercise 2: Fill in missing small grammar words. Example: “We need ___ apartment near ___ school and near ___ subway station.” Then check: “a,” “a,” “a.”

Exercise 3: Take one long sentence from your letter and cut it into two. For example: “We prefer a modern apartment. It should be close to my office and a good school.” This builds better accuracy.

• The writer uses enough topic words for housing and location.
• Some vocabulary choices help the property agent understand the request.
• The writer attempts less common words, not only very basic ones.

The letter uses useful words connected to the task, such as “elementary school,” “public service,” “downtown,” “subway station,” “shopping mall,” “neighborhood,” and “apartment.” These words fit the topic of finding accommodation.

Some phrases give practical meaning to the agent. For example, “lower than 10 years old” shows the writer wants a newer property. “Price is not a concern” also gives clear information about budget.

The writer also tries wider word choice with phrases like “living quality” and “government building.” This shows an attempt to move beyond very simple vocabulary.

• Several word choices are unnatural or not the best fit for this situation.
• Spelling mistakes reduce clarity and accuracy.
• Some repeated simple words could be replaced with more suitable housing language.

Some vocabulary is understandable but not natural in English. For example, “my working space” would be better as “my workplace” or “my office.” “Neighbor quality” is not a natural phrase. A better choice is “quiet neighbourhood” or “safe area.” “House fixing” is also weak; “repairs” or “maintenance” fits this task much better.

There are several spelling problems, including “recommand” for “recommend” and “accomadation” for “accommodation.” In IELTS vocabulary, spelling matters because it affects how accurately words are used.

A few expressions are too vague. “Nice public service” is not clear. Does the writer mean public transport, health services, or local facilities? More exact words would help. For example: “We would prefer good public transport and nearby shops.”

The phrase “living quality” is understandable, but “quality of life” is the normal phrase. Learning common word partnerships like this will make the letter sound more natural and clear.

• Build a word list for housing, neighbourhood, and transport.
• Practice replacing unnatural phrases with common English ones.
• Review common spelling of key task words.

Exercise 1: Make three columns: home, area, and transport. Under home, write words like “apartment,” “bedroom,” “modern,” and “maintenance.” Under area, write “quiet neighbourhood,” “safe area,” and “near a park.” Under transport, write “subway station,” “bus stop,” and “public transport.” Then use two from each column in a new letter.

Exercise 2: Replace phrases from your letter. Change “working space” to “workplace,” “house fixing” to “repairs,” and “neighbor quality” to “safe and quiet neighbourhood.”

Exercise 3: Copy and check the spelling of 15 common IELTS letter words, such as “accommodation,” “recommend,” “neighbourhood,” and “convenient.” Then write each one in a full sentence.

• The letter has a clear overall order.
• Main ideas are grouped into separate parts.
• Some linking words are used to move between ideas.

The letter begins with the writer’s situation and family, then moves to location needs, then extra preferences, and ends with price. This order is easy enough to follow. The reader can see the main purpose from the first paragraph.

The writer also separates ideas into short paragraphs. One paragraph explains the move. Another explains location and building needs. Another adds extra wishes like a park and transport. This helps the reader follow the message.

Simple linking words are used, such as “In addition” and “Finally.” These give some help with the flow between points.

• Some sentences do not connect smoothly inside the paragraph.
• A few linking choices are weak or confusing.
• Some ideas are placed together without a clear internal order.

In the second paragraph, several ideas are pushed together: “near my working space,” “good elementary school,” “office is in downtown,” and “public service.” These are all related, but the order feels a little mixed. A clearer order would be: first workplace, then school, then transport, then building type.

Some connectors are not used well. For example, “Although the convenience in downtown must be great, near subway station and shopping mall are always good for living quality.” This sentence starts with “Although,” but the contrast is not fully finished. The reader expects a clear second side of the contrast. A better version is: “Downtown is convenient, but we would also like to live near a subway station and a shopping mall.”

There is also some weak reference between sentences. “one floor in a tall building is better” comes after “We prefer to have nice public service,” but the connection is not clear. Public services and floor choice are different ideas. They would be easier to follow if written separately.

The ending adds “Price is not a concern,” which is useful, but it comes very suddenly. It would connect better with a phrase like “As for the budget” or “Regarding the cost.”

• Practice making one paragraph for one main topic only.
• Practice using simple connectors correctly.
• Make a short plan before writing the full letter.

Exercise 1: Before writing, make four mini-headings: family, type of home, location, and budget. Put only related details under each heading. This will improve paragraph order.

Exercise 2: Rewrite long ideas with simple connectors like “and,” “but,” “because,” and “also.” For example: “We want to live near my office, and we also need a good school for our children.”

Exercise 3: Take one paragraph from your letter and number the ideas from most important to least important. Then rewrite it in that order. This will make the message easier to follow.